Essay/Score	Use of Quotes and Examples	Strengths	Weaknesses	Recommendation for Improvement
1A / 6 Thesis:	"our souls have caught the flame." Emphasizes the essence of this difficult situation. "chains," "death," and "cruel." Explains how these such words create a solemn tone. "the lash of the cruel driver." Shows how phrases like this convey the harsh reality of slavery, and why it is a major issue.	Effectively uses direct evidence, with great word choice, and quotes to support analysis. Even does a nice job of integrating the quotes into their sentences, without choppiness, which helps to establish a flow throughout the response. Also makes mention of how Stewart's diction affects the tone of her lecture.	N/A (since 6 is the max score)	N/A (since 6 is the max score)
1B / 4 Thesis:	"white persons of either sex." Makes reference to how the opposition would not be in favor of her views toward this. "willing to die by the sword as the pestilence." Showing how confident Stewart is to fight for change. "lazy," "idle," and "again." Explains how her diction creates an eloquent tone.	Does a nice job of explaining what Stewart does in a chronological order (from start of lecture to end of lecture), which helps to set an established order of information, and is easy to follow when cross-referencing between the two.	Does not use a sufficient amount of quotes to support their statements. Simply just states what the author did.	Use more direct evidence from the passage to support analysis.
1C / 2 Thesis:	"like the scorching sands of Arabia." Shows that Stewart uses figurative language to show the seriousness of slavery. "...the employments we must pursue are as unprofitable to us as the spider's web on the floating bubbles that vanish into air." Explains some of the problems people such as her face because of slavery. "it was asserted that we were 'a ragged set, crying for liberty,' I reply to it..." Stewart's reply to stereotypes.	Explains what Stewart does in her lecture, as well as the effect it has on the audience. (However, does not have direct evidence to support them, see weaknesses)	Insufficient amount of direct evidence, statements are very bland, short (for the most part), and come across very choppy. As well, quotes are put in with no smooth transition into their explanation, and do not actually fully explain how these back up their analysis.	Include more quotes, and integrate them from the passage into the statements (not just inputting them by themselves) to make the statement flow better, as well as be more specific in each statement and state how the evidence supports the analysis.