Essay/Score	Claim	Evidence	Commentary	Recommendation for Improvement
A / 1-4-1	"Agencies looking to establish wind farms should consider the geographic location of their potential wind farm and its vicinity to resident communities, in order to avoid stirring up more controversy in society’s debate on how to settle an increasingly demanding appetite for energy."	The student in their response does a good job of using effective/supporting evidence and sorting it by the key points they use in their argument, not simply by the order in which source they come from.	The student here effectively carries on their argument with not just their evidence as sole support, but their own contributions/commentary as well. Through the use of their own points and ideas, they were able to develop an effective well put together argument.	The student did an overall well job of conveying their stance in their argument and providing evidence to support their claims. Perhaps restating their overall claim at the end would help to enhance it even further, and tie the knot on their argument.
L / 1-3-0	"The most important factors that an individual or agency should consider when deciding whether to establish a wind farm are the noise impacts, the alteration of landscapes, and the cost of the wind farms."	The student here in their response does the opposite of Essay A, in which they sort their evidence based on the order of the sources themselves, and not in order of the key points used within their argument, which hinders the effectiveness of it. However, they do pick evidence that supports their argument.	The student did a good job of summarizing the sources they used to help support their claims, however they do not utilize much commentary to explain their evidence and integrate themselves into the argument.	The main recommendation for improvement here is to display their evidence in order of key points, which would help the flow of the argument and especially use more commentary to help explain their evidence and add themselves to it; not just letting the evidence do all the talking.
E / 1-2-0	"Some factors you should consider before converting to that source of energy is, wind power is clean and renewable, their appearance, and the cost it will be. These factors can determine whether you establish a wind farm."	Evidence used in this response does not effectively support it, and as well they put it in order of source appearance, and not in order of the key points of their argument.	Summarization is used well throughout the response, however the student states in their commentary already known facts and does not contribute anything new through it.	To improve this response, I would suggest using more effective evidence to better support the student's claims, more effective commentary to support/explain the evidence they use, and as well develop a much more effective claim to carry their position throughout their argument.